79 Jowbony Street
Courier Mail ZILLAWINGAPORTASTAN
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Referring: “The real cost of posh’s locks” 17 AUG
28.08.09
Dear Editor,
I am writing to you to express why I am against the idea of the article “The real cost of posh’s locks”. You have portrayed in the article that these religious Indian women are being enforced to sacrifice their hair for Vishnu. In fact these women voluntarily give away their hair for the sake of their religion. This process is a common thing for women to do before their weddings as it is shown as a sign of giving away their pride and vanity. In the article it says “religious ceremony, called tonsuring” so why should they be upset about being true to Vishnu.
If these women were getting treated horribly they would not be “waiting patiently in line”, instead they would be escaping from every possible exit. As for the profit going to the salons, they deserve the profit as the Indian women are not asking what do they get in return, instead they enjoy the fulfilment of serving their god. Without the luscious Indian locks being profited by salons many businesses would be scrabbling around for money and a lot of men and women would lose their jobs. For the sentence “beauty comes at a price”, yes is does come at a price and that price is very expensive so it is not like the real hair is being sold for cheap prices. These profits go on to benefit the world as many A-listers rely on extensions to advertise products to their best standards, this then help many other businesses strive.
Thank you for reading my letter and I do hope you learn from this letter to create better and more efficient articles in the future.
Yours faithfully,
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Courtney, it is great to see that you are keeping up with your work and that your responses are of a high standard. The convention in writing a Letter to the Editor is that the greeting should be "Dear Editor". Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteCourtney, I agree entirely with Mrs Grehan's comments. You are doing a wonderful job and I encourage you to keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteAs a small suggestion (one made to staff from Mr Powell originally), try to ensure that you include some visuals in your blog as well. This helps break up the view a little bit for your audience. If you're not sure how to do this, let me know :)